Sunday, January 5, 2014

He Loves me




I could not wait to open my eyes and start my day today. This is the day I have been waiting for since the last 5 years. I fell in love with Ayaan the very first time our eyes met. But never could I fathom his inclination. 

And today he has asked me out for a date. He says he has to tell me something.

With a pounding heart and dreamy eyes I look at him. Is this THE moment??


Finally those unbelievable words meet my ears...

”Nupur I am in love”

a pause and I gasp

“with your little sister”…..



A 100 word fiction  written on the prompt “My Little Sister” at Write Tribe




28 comments:

  1. Awww..what a heartbreak...silly Ayaan, why does he have to come over and tell her THAT?? How imature...I guess the protagonist is better off without Ayaan :) Hee Hee

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  2. Excellent! :D Loved the punch line!

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  3. Haha...just as well I don't have one! ;)

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  4. Haha.. thats a creative take.. but a heartbreaking one !!

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  5. Haha...that was an interesting twist...heartbreaking for the protagonist though but cleverly written!

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  6. Oh!! That's heartbreaking!!
    You have written it fabulously! The twist is an interesting take! :)

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  7. Ohh what a twist at the end! Gr8 take on the prompt!

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  8. Aww that's so sad, but an excellent take on the prompt.

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  9. OH! That will break her heart! A fab twist!! Loved it :)

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  10. Twist in the tale is heartbreaking! Very well written!

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  11. aka ruskin bond, nicely done.

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  12. Whoa...that's the bomb!! Not the best news you'd want to hear from a crush!

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  13. What an unexpected truth. Very good narrative.

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  14. Awesome!! purrrfect take on the prompt woman :D

    Richa

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  15. Well if that isn't a slap in the face I don't know what is! Awesome take on the prompt. ♥

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  16. Heartbreak and embarrassment! Really sad...
    A nice post

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