Sunday, January 5, 2014

He Loves me




I could not wait to open my eyes and start my day today. This is the day I have been waiting for since the last 5 years. I fell in love with Ayaan the very first time our eyes met. But never could I fathom his inclination. 

And today he has asked me out for a date. He says he has to tell me something.

With a pounding heart and dreamy eyes I look at him. Is this THE moment??


Finally those unbelievable words meet my ears...

”Nupur I am in love”

a pause and I gasp

“with your little sister”…..



A 100 word fiction  written on the prompt “My Little Sister” at Write Tribe




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28 comments:

  1. AnonymousJanuary 5, 2014 at 10:37 AM

    Awww..what a heartbreak...silly Ayaan, why does he have to come over and tell her THAT?? How imature...I guess the protagonist is better off without Ayaan :) Hee Hee

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  2. PratikshyaJanuary 5, 2014 at 10:41 AM

    unique take on the prompt...liked..

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  3. Vidya SuryJanuary 5, 2014 at 10:47 AM

    Excellent! :D Loved the punch line!

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  4. Corinne RodriguesJanuary 5, 2014 at 11:01 AM

    Haha...just as well I don't have one! ;)

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  5. Jyotsna BhatiaJanuary 5, 2014 at 11:58 AM

    Haha.. thats a creative take.. but a heartbreaking one !!

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  6. AnonymousJanuary 5, 2014 at 11:58 AM

    Haha...that was an interesting twist...heartbreaking for the protagonist though but cleverly written!

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  7. PixieJanuary 5, 2014 at 12:15 PM

    Oh!! That's heartbreaking!!
    You have written it fabulously! The twist is an interesting take! :)

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  8. NabanitaJanuary 5, 2014 at 12:16 PM

    Ohh what a twist at the end! Gr8 take on the prompt!

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  9. SuzyJanuary 5, 2014 at 12:19 PM

    Aww that's so sad, but an excellent take on the prompt.

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  10. Shilpa GargJanuary 5, 2014 at 2:05 PM

    OH! That will break her heart! A fab twist!! Loved it :)

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  11. payal agarwalJanuary 5, 2014 at 2:13 PM

    Twist in the tale is heartbreaking! Very well written!

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  12. AnonymousJanuary 5, 2014 at 2:22 PM

    aka ruskin bond, nicely done.

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  13. AnonymousJanuary 5, 2014 at 3:42 PM

    Sad...

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  14. Michelle LiewJanuary 5, 2014 at 4:04 PM

    Whoa...that's the bomb!! Not the best news you'd want to hear from a crush!

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  15. Michelle LiewJanuary 5, 2014 at 4:05 PM

    Excellent 100 words with a twist!

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  16. UnknownJanuary 5, 2014 at 5:33 PM

    What an unexpected truth. Very good narrative.

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  17. UnknownJanuary 5, 2014 at 6:20 PM

    Oopz! That was a heartbreak. :(

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  18. Richa SinghJanuary 5, 2014 at 7:47 PM

    Awesome!! purrrfect take on the prompt woman :D

    Richa

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  19. UnknownJanuary 6, 2014 at 7:25 AM

    Well if that isn't a slap in the face I don't know what is! Awesome take on the prompt. ♥

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  20. AnonymousJanuary 6, 2014 at 7:34 AM

    Heartbreak and embarrassment! Really sad...
    A nice post

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  21. Aayesha S HakimJanuary 6, 2014 at 12:09 PM

    isssshhh.. heartbreaking :(

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  22. kalpana solsiJanuary 6, 2014 at 2:30 PM

    this is sad but well-written.

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  23. BhagyasheeJanuary 8, 2014 at 11:30 AM

    ohhhhh that so sad

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  24. ObsessivemomJanuary 9, 2014 at 9:00 AM

    Aww. Sad.

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